I wrote a review of this story on Amazon.Com. Thankfully, I didn’t spend any actual money on it. I used my Kindle Unlimited membership. The story was horrible. Stay away, I couldn’t even finish this story, it was so bad. I seriously feel like a small piece of my life was wasted and I may have lost a few brain cells.
Here is what the Book Cover looks like.
Here is the review I left on Amazon.Com.
There is so much wrong with this story.
1) Do not mix present tense with past tense. You will drive your readers crazy doing this. You drove me crazy with the constant tense switching. Present tense doesn’t work with 99% of fiction stories. Also 1st person isn’t that good. Some people like it, but I don’t.
2) The dialogue is drab and robotic. Also word choice is very poor.
3) The characters must be from the planet Krypton, because Sarah is getting bashed in the head by twenty, yes I said twenty, zombies all at the same time and they all have crude weapons and oddly she is not only still alive, but she is still conscious enough to be choked out by one of them. Also, to continue with the extremely super-heroic characters, they are digging… yes digging from one city to another city. Tunnels.. they are digging tunnels. There are only four people digging in shifts and they are going from one city to the next, underground, with shovels in… take a seat and brace yourself… they go from one city to another in a day or less. Yes digging… with shovels in one day or less. Are they extremely small cities? Is the world so compact that four people can dig through hard clay and rock between two cities in hours or a day? Or maybe like I said earlier? The main characters are all from the planet Krypton. In that case, why don’t the characters just fly from one city to the next.
4) More problems with realism. They are scavenging for food, cans of food from one city to the next. They find an old man who, for no reason, just gives them 100 cans of food. Where did they carry all these cans of food? As they are digging a super long tunnel very quickly from one city to the next, how do they move all these supplies down the tunnel as they dig?
5) The biggest problem of them all. The writer skips through all the fight scenes, all the opportunities to be gory and action-packed and simply says “They fought the zombies.” Oh yes and Aria has her “incredibly accurate” marksmanship and is equally incredible with a knife as she takes down literally hundreds of zombies in a single paragraph. But, this writer spends pages and pages describing a water fight with exquisite detail. Writer, why can we not have this much detail when you describe the fight? What if you told us how Aria’s knife sliced into the zombie’s cheek, severing its black goo covered tongue. This is a zombie apocalypse story, not a damn pillow fight.
Writer, I recommend you unpublish this “story” and change your name and try again by writing a real story. I am certain that the other review here (the five star review) was either paid for or given by your dearest friend in the world who cheated me into wasting an hour of my life reading this drivel.
That’s the whole review. Yes I know it is harsh, but seriously, You do NOT want to read this story. It will make your head hurt.
That’s my public service for today.